Dear Professor Brad,
I am Mitthoon, one of your year 1 students from the telecommunication module. I am currently pursuing my degree with honours in telematics, at Singapore Institute of Technology. I have completed my diploma in Computer Engineering at Singapore Polytechnic.
One of the main reasons why I took up this course is because, the modules in this course are very similar to those in my previous diploma course. In Computer Engineering, I have learnt about android mobile programming, digital circuits, cloud computing, database management and so on. Moreover, this course is equipped with modules about advanced technology of transportation which captivated me. How programming enhances these areas in the society, really amused me. I was really curious about this course when i came to know about it through the open house. Since this course stands out from the other mainstream software programming courses, i chose this.
During my free time i would go swimming, jogging and workout at the gym regularly. More than going out and hanging out with my friends, i prefer to chill at home and watch my television shows.
My strength lies in communication such that if i am comfortable with the person, i would tend to communicate freely with him/her as if i have known them for a long peroid of time. I am also open to discussion within group members and able to lend listening ears to each and every opinion being voiced out. Hence this helps in allowing everyone to mutually agree on a point which would help to prevent miscommunication.
One of my weaknesses in communication is that i tend to use a lot of singlish while talking and I also have a habit of stammering at few instances, especially during presentations and interviews.
I really hope that throughout the course of this module, i can improve in the ways i communicate with others without using singlish. I also hope to reduce my tendency to stammer at times.
I am eagerly looking forward for your upcoming lessons and I hope it will be a fun and fruitful experience for me. Thank you so much for your time.
With regards,
Mitthoon
I am Mitthoon, one of your year 1 students from the telecommunication module. I am currently pursuing my degree with honours in telematics, at Singapore Institute of Technology. I have completed my diploma in Computer Engineering at Singapore Polytechnic.
One of the main reasons why I took up this course is because, the modules in this course are very similar to those in my previous diploma course. In Computer Engineering, I have learnt about android mobile programming, digital circuits, cloud computing, database management and so on. Moreover, this course is equipped with modules about advanced technology of transportation which captivated me. How programming enhances these areas in the society, really amused me. I was really curious about this course when i came to know about it through the open house. Since this course stands out from the other mainstream software programming courses, i chose this.
During my free time i would go swimming, jogging and workout at the gym regularly. More than going out and hanging out with my friends, i prefer to chill at home and watch my television shows.
My strength lies in communication such that if i am comfortable with the person, i would tend to communicate freely with him/her as if i have known them for a long peroid of time. I am also open to discussion within group members and able to lend listening ears to each and every opinion being voiced out. Hence this helps in allowing everyone to mutually agree on a point which would help to prevent miscommunication.
One of my weaknesses in communication is that i tend to use a lot of singlish while talking and I also have a habit of stammering at few instances, especially during presentations and interviews.
I really hope that throughout the course of this module, i can improve in the ways i communicate with others without using singlish. I also hope to reduce my tendency to stammer at times.
I am eagerly looking forward for your upcoming lessons and I hope it will be a fun and fruitful experience for me. Thank you so much for your time.
With regards,
Mitthoon
Hi mithoon,
ReplyDeleteIt was great reading your letter.
The letter was really well written with a good command of English as well as good flow.
However, the use of indentations in your paragraphs could be improved.
Hope to learn more about you in the months to come! Cheers!
Hey Mitthoon,
ReplyDeleteYou have great content and were able to state your reason to join telematics.
However, you could improve in some areas:
1. Paragraph indentation
2. In your second paragraph, instead of " I took up this course is because, the..." you should have use " I took up this course because the ..."
I hope that we can learn and improve ourselves in communication in the upcoming months.
Regards,
Haziq
Dear Mitthoon,
ReplyDeleteThanks for this clear and concise letter. You attend to all the areas of the assignment and provide fairly clear detail. For instance, related to your interest in telematics at SIT, you have explained what some of your poly educational study areas were and what 'captivated' you. You also openly explain your perceived skills weaknesses, and tag on your strength, and tyhen you mention your varied downtime interests (though you don’t provide a transition at the start of the paragraph for that discussion). In terms of what you have addressed for module goals, rest assured that we will address those very points as we focus on the oral presentation.
In terms of specific language issues with this post, please take note of the following:
1. word use/phrasing
-- at few instances, > sometimes
2. punctuation
-- in telematics, at Singapore Institute of Technology. > ?
-- because, the modules > ?
-- How programming enhances these areas in the society, really amused me. > ?
3. Miscellaneous (sloppy?) items
-- You mention "the telecommunication module". Is that the title of this module?
-- You've failed to capitalize "I" in numerous instances. That seems weak for a formal letter.
-- using singlish. > (no use of caps)
Let's work on revising this. I look forward to learning more about you this term.
Cheers,
Brad